BANG! Something was in the attic I could here it moving. Dad said there is nothing there. But I new there was. That night when everyone was asleep I took one of dads ladders and went up to investigate. The attic was dark. I shone my touch. I could hear something grunting growling behind me. Slowly, I turned my head there was a tall, blood sucking werewolf standing right in front of me. It lifted its paw it had razor sharp claws. I closed my eyes hoping it was all a dream but it wasn't. Then I saw what it was holding...
Anna Povall
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wow, what tension - and it plays on that whole things about children not being believed, very scary
ReplyDeleteGreat idea setting it in the attic. So scary when you hear something so close, but don't know what it is. And there's alway so many dark corners and places for something to hide. Very frightening!
ReplyDeleteThat last line is such a brilliant hook too - you want to know what it's got - but you know it won't be nice!
ReplyDeleteAnna, love the way you begin with a noise in the attic which immediately plays upon the reader's fear. You build up the tension as we follow you up the ladder so that I really didn't want you to shine the torch at all.
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